Monday, 31 October 2011

Fallen Star


You're like a night star
a much too bright star
I'm like a lonely light
in the corner of your eye
you look straight at me
and I disappear..
O love, was I never there?


8 comments:

  1. How sad.. poignant poem...lovely write

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  2. The look that doesn't see - heartwrenching.

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  3. Beautifully sad! Well done!

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  4. this is fun, smart metaphor, wow.

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  5. A great metaphor, nicely done

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  6. Magnificent as always. You do such an excellent job at conveying the emotion in your poems! The first two lines were my favorite.

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