Wednesday, 5 October 2011

Titbits


I don't want the titbits
you have to offer
the crumbs from a larger pie,
I want it all
including the tantalizing aroma
and the lingering taste,
and I'm not gonna share it
being a greedy kid,
If anybody so much as
makes a move for it
I'm gonna knock their teeth out,
and I'm gonna keep
coming back for more and more
until there is
no separate pie and me,
'cause my desire for you baby
is insatiable...


26 comments:

  1. I like the greedy kid analogy - very apt!

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  2. The first four lines - superb.

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  3. I ain't gonna get in your way! Nicely done! I like this one!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/05/treasure/

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  4. That was SWEET! I love it, I really do.

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  5. LOVED lines 4 -6. A very clever poem with a picture to match :)

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  6. With that kind of attitude, I think the narrator will get it all!

    My Contribution

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  7. Thanks a lot everyone !!! Really appreciate your comments !!!

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  8. hahaha this is cute. a greedy kid. nice well written! please check mine too: http://wp.me/pTDjw-vo

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  9. No, not scary ... really, really cool. I was not expecting that ending. I loved it!

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  10. that's a fun read :) loved the poem.

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  11. Well written poem. The persona comes across vividly.

    Here is my entry:
    http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/10/everyone.html

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  12. Thanks crimsoncorvus, Old Raven, Rajlakshmi, Jack Edwards Poetry for your comments !!!

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  13. This is great I love this poem so much the greed of wanting it all for yourself and I love your image that you chose to go with your poem it shows the that he is serious well done
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/05/today%e2%80%99s-feelings/

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  14. hahahaha :D so cute :D and the pic gives the perfect sentiment to the poem :)
    i want the whole pie too ;)

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  15. @Ann LeFlore - thanks a lot ! @megzone - Thanks and if you go for it, I'm sure you'll get it :)

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  16. Nice one. I kind of like to have it all too.

    Melanie

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  17. Must be incredible to be so desired.

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  18. @Melanie, @dakshi, @The Orange Tree, @jeaniemcbain - Thank you all so much !

    @SandyCarlson - But not so much to desire yourself :)

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  19. Great poem. Made me smile! Thank you! My Poet's Rally offering: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/10/11/continue/

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  20. Ooooh! I loved that. The pie and nothing but the whole pie!

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  21. Very good. Love the photo.
    William

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  22. @Ava, @shail, @talking leaves -Thank you so much !!!

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