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Wednesday, 5 October 2011

Titbits


I don't want the titbits
you have to offer
the crumbs from a larger pie,
I want it all
including the tantalizing aroma
and the lingering taste,
and I'm not gonna share it
being a greedy kid,
If anybody so much as
makes a move for it
I'm gonna knock their teeth out,
and I'm gonna keep
coming back for more and more
until there is
no separate pie and me,
'cause my desire for you baby
is insatiable...


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26 comments:

  1. Bubba5 October 2011 at 21:06

    I like the greedy kid analogy - very apt!

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  2. Danny Earl Simmons5 October 2011 at 21:42

    A little scary.

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  3. Fountains5 October 2011 at 23:36

    The first four lines - superb.

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  4. Marbles in My Pocket6 October 2011 at 00:57

    I ain't gonna get in your way! Nicely done! I like this one!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/05/treasure/

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  5. Kristen Haskell6 October 2011 at 03:25

    That was SWEET! I love it, I really do.

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  6. Laura Maria6 October 2011 at 07:03

    LOVED lines 4 -6. A very clever poem with a picture to match :)

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  7. Magical Mystical Teacher6 October 2011 at 07:17

    With that kind of attitude, I think the narrator will get it all!

    My Contribution

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  8. Kremo6 October 2011 at 09:45

    Thanks a lot everyone !!! Really appreciate your comments !!!

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  9. Anonymous6 October 2011 at 14:37

    hahaha this is cute. a greedy kid. nice well written! please check mine too: http://wp.me/pTDjw-vo

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  10. Liz Rice-Sosne6 October 2011 at 19:28

    No, not scary ... really, really cool. I was not expecting that ending. I loved it!

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  11. Rajlakshmi6 October 2011 at 19:56

    that's a fun read :) loved the poem.

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  12. Jack Edwards Poetry6 October 2011 at 23:26

    Well written poem. The persona comes across vividly.

    Here is my entry:
    http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/10/everyone.html

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  13. Kremo7 October 2011 at 01:08

    Thanks crimsoncorvus, Old Raven, Rajlakshmi, Jack Edwards Poetry for your comments !!!

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  14. Ann LeFlore7 October 2011 at 04:48

    This is great I love this poem so much the greed of wanting it all for yourself and I love your image that you chose to go with your poem it shows the that he is serious well done
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/05/today%e2%80%99s-feelings/

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  15. Anonymous7 October 2011 at 07:58

    hahahaha :D so cute :D and the pic gives the perfect sentiment to the poem :)
    i want the whole pie too ;)

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  16. Kremo8 October 2011 at 12:21

    @Ann LeFlore - thanks a lot ! @megzone - Thanks and if you go for it, I'm sure you'll get it :)

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  17. Cassiopeia Rises9 October 2011 at 01:17

    Nice one. I kind of like to have it all too.

    Melanie

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  18. SandyCarlson9 October 2011 at 07:36

    Must be incredible to be so desired.

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  19. dakshi9 October 2011 at 19:16

    wonderful....

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  20. The Orange Tree11 October 2011 at 00:01

    amazing.

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  21. Anonymous11 October 2011 at 22:09

    Very nice indeed :)

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  22. Kremo11 October 2011 at 23:23

    @Melanie, @dakshi, @The Orange Tree, @jeaniemcbain - Thank you all so much !

    @SandyCarlson - But not so much to desire yourself :)

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  23. Ava12 October 2011 at 07:15

    Great poem. Made me smile! Thank you! My Poet's Rally offering: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/10/11/continue/

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  24. shail12 October 2011 at 16:57

    Ooooh! I loved that. The pie and nothing but the whole pie!

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  25. Anonymous15 October 2011 at 02:26

    Very good. Love the photo.
    William

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  26. Kremo15 October 2011 at 06:09

    @Ava, @shail, @talking leaves -Thank you so much !!!

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